Philosophical Poem: Prison

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    Philosophical Poem: Prison

    Just wrote this all of a sudden, at midnight. I couldn't sleep, so I had an inspiration, and yeah, that's it :/ Ah and yeah, I'm not good at rhyming, so I stopped trying it.

    Inside of someone else's
    Body and mind,
    I'm living my life
    If you can call it life.

    Depending all upon his goodwill,
    Being controlled in everything.
    I need His permission
    To do anything.



    Am I not a person?
    Don't I have the right
    to decide freely
    what I do? who I am?

    I meet all demands
    By which an individual is defined:
    Conscience and self-confidence,
    Feelings and a free will.

    I have a personality,
    I can live on my own.
    And though the possiblity is there
    I am not given a body of my own.

    For I am not found real
    Only a far away part of His person and mind.
    And so I will stay, live on
    In my home (and prison).


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    nice poem I think the last line should be "in my home,my Prison lone
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    Beautiful.

    I first was confused with the "His", but due to the "H" I thought it was "someone" on the first line.

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    this soundz nice man ;}

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    Written wonderfully. What else is there to say?


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