Dead Men Walking (Chapter.. 1!)

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    Dead Men Walking (Chapter.. 1!)

    In the year 2018, Earth was destroyed. In 2030, the Mars colonists moved to the planet called "Enheartha" a frost bitten hell on earth but the only one with organic lifeforms on it, though not far from the Milky Way galaxy. In 2050, A colony sprang up on the outer main city of Necuela, the planet's center of fame. Colonys began appearing all over Enheartha like the Beetle Flu did so on Earth in 2012. Suddenly, they all started losing contact with Necuela, except for one colony, "Deadam". Deadam was most commonly called Dead for short. Not much colonists lived in that city, it was most uncommonly referred to as Ghostown also. There couldve only been at the maximum 200 civilians and 50 guards. One day rumors had been popping up around Deadam about Necuela being infected with a deadly poisen that had reached the surface. The colonists acted crazy, as thoughtless and as lifeless as the dead. Unfortunetly, Deadam had
    not gotten a call back from when they had called in for more food. This was bad. After this, they sent out a squad of 5 to investigate the nearby city atleast 100 miles away. Their names where Johnathen, Jay, Brandon, Jr.Ross ( Mostly called Ross" ), and Kevin, this is their story.
    "Damnit Brandon will you turn down that damn gone blasted radio!" Johnathen said indefinetly, not looking for a reply. " Whatever you say, ..Sarge" Brandon replied, mumbling under his cold breath that fogged his helmet screen and visor. As they drove in the back of the Rover, the speaker-phone turned on witha loud "SSSSSZZZZZZZZ" as if the captain was breathing into the microphone. "Can I have your attention please soldiers? This ride has come to an end 5 miles off of the dop-off point outside of the city.. uh.. we have a very large group of blue, spider like animals in the middle of the road and we cannot proceed.. Please exit with caution through the side door, ETA will be in 10 hours, out.".
    Quickly Johnathen yelled "Go! Go! Go!" with his demanding, yet stern and fierce voice. Some called him The Killer, others, The Bear. Quickly the marines in their high-combat mechanism suits that clattered loudly against the silver plated floor dispatched, Jay, Brandon, Ross, Kevin, and last, Johnathen. As they got out of the truck and into the mist, they could bearly see eachother 5 feet out into the growing darkness even though it was 27:00 AM. The ground was a blue, stone ground, most likely they were on the road. There were no trees, just a long, rocky and dirty canvas of these blue-spider like monsters with 4 claws on each side of their body sticking out of the ground. The tires of the Rover squealed back like a banshee's scream. The truck disappeared from the mist atleast 10 feet away but you could still
    hear the tires, like a scream in the midnight morning. " Advance slowly, and steadily." Johnathen whispered. Their breath could be seen in the air like little spirits warning them not to proceed. " Shit I know what these are! Stay slow, they
    are spores! ".
    The cold mist that condenced from the spores slowly fogged up Jay's visor. In a deep but firm voice he said " I will to get off of this hell forsaken planet if its the last thing I do. ". Slowly but steadily he walked across the blue-moss
    covered spores. Brandon had no intrest to these creatures that lived on the ground. He had walked as if he nothing was there. " Watch your step Private!, Do you want to get us all killed?" Jay screamed as Brandon kicked one of the spores. Suddenly all of the spores woke up and all looked dead ahead, eyes glowing like demons in the dark. "Do not move a muscle.. Stand still or they will see you." Johnathen had said. Brandon had not heeded his warning and kept walking. As Jay tried to start screaming Johnathen put his handover Jay's mouth and whispered "Leave him, he is a dead man walking..".




    How was Chapter 1 you guyzzzzzz? Wasnt it awesome! I hope you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!!! Leave me as much comments and feedback as you possibly can!! THANKS!

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    Don't eat me Jolinar :<

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    Thanks alot! i worked very hard on it!
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