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    New Welcome Message - feedback?

    I just finished crafting a better Say-Hello message. Could you do me a favor and review it? Please feel free to drop me some comments . They are highly appreciated.

    Hais $username!

    Trust you are doing good and enjoy your stay over here. Thanks for registering, that's appreciated. Just writing this message to say you hello and to give you a quick overview of our site :-).



    Did you know that we have 250,000 registered members and henceforth are one of the biggest Gaming Communities out there? Despite being big, we need active members like you that help us improving our community even further. So - Welcome! If there is a problem, then you will most likely find an answer on our boards. We'd love to see you active soon.

    I made a quick welcome video, showing how to use our platform. Also explains unique promotions and special rewards for participating!


    Few steps only to get started:
    1. Confirm your Email
    2. Drop an Hello-Post in our Say-Hello Forum
    3. Update your Profile
    4. Adjust your Settings
    5. Check out our Navigation-bar for a quick overview of our forums.




    If you have any further questions, please make use of our forums. We will gladly help you.

    Talk to you soon,
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    Mind if I point out some grammatical errors?

    Hais $username!

    Trust you are doing good and enjoy your stay over here. Thanks for registering, that's appreciated. Just writing this message to tell you hello and to give you a quick overview of our site :-).

    Did you know that we have 250,000 registered members and henceforth are one of the biggest Gaming Communities out there? Despite being big, we need active members like you that help us improve our community even further. So - Welcome! If there is a problem, then you will most likely find an answer on our boards. We'd love to see you active soon.

    I made a quick welcome video, showing how to use our platform. It also explains unique promotions and special rewards for participating!

    Highschool English skills rule! Otherwise, this is a very nice welcome message! Nice job.

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    I really like it.
    But is it meant to be " hais " ?! O_o

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    It has a few grammar errors, yes... i will look on it tomorrow
    I guess mr big V should look over it, since its his maiden language?
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    ya i like it. Just change the grammar mistakes and change hais to hello or whatever. I was thinking that we should have a welcome message for people who don't know english very well? Such as there should be a check box which is your desired language while registering with empty boxes one can check.
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    Hello $username!

    I hope you are doing good and that you enjoy your stay over here. Thank you for registering, we appreciate it. I am just writing this message to say hello, and to give you a quick overview of our site :-).

    Did you know that we have 250,000 registered members and henceforth are one of the biggest Gaming Communities out there? Despite being big, we need active members like you that help us improving our community even further. So - Welcome! If there is a problem, then you will most likely find an answer on our boards. We'd love to see you active soon.

    I made a quick welcome video, showing how to use our platform. The video also explains unique promotions and special rewards for participating!


    Here is a few steps to get you started:
    1. Confirm your Email
    2. Drop an Hello-Post in our Say-Hello Forum
    3. Update your Profile
    4. Adjust your Settings
    5. Check out our Navigation-bar for a quick overview of our forums.




    If you have any further questions, please make use of our forums. We will gladly help you.

    Talk to you soon,
    Hendrik
    Thats how i think it should be at least I am not english, so i guess its not perfect...
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    If you want,I could have it rewritten into perfect grammar,however,since most of the users do not have their english as their mother language,you are better slanging it,making it easier to read.

    Edit:
    Oh and I also like Robin's idea to box-check one of the few languages given,like English or German.That way we would look fancy with perfectly written english and german
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    Quote Originally Posted by Flying Panda View Post
    If you want,I could have it rewritten into perfect grammar,however,since most of the users do not have their english as their mother language,you are better slanging it,making it easier to read.

    Edit:
    Oh and I also like Robin's idea to box-check one of the few languages given,like English or German.That way we would look fancy with perfectly written english and german
    ya so if they check the german box the german welcoming message would come up instead of the english and vice versa.
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    Very nice, this is my madien language and i thought it wasnt the worst grammer. isnt someone with a different language going to have a built in translator anyways?

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